A little glib, but good advice at Bad Glacier on writing the law school personal statement.
do want to caution you about having everyone and his brother commenting
on your personal statement as is suggested in some of the comments. You
will inevitably get conflicting advice and bad advice and good
advice. Attempting to incorporate all of it, may just suck the
life out of your essay.
So definitely show it to others.
Professional writers have editors for a reason; they know writing
requires rewriting. They know their work benefits from a critical and
fresh eye. But they don’t ask everyone and his brother to review their
I recommend you show your essay to 2-3 people who
know you well and 2-3 people who know how to write well or are
experienced in admissions.
Thanks to Blawg wisdom for the link.